I read a lot of stories, both to look for ideas to steal draw inspiration from, and also because of course I enjoy this hobby; with that in mind, here's some tips if you're interested in writing yourself.
Setting/Introduction
One thing I often
struggle with is how long to make an introduction. Many (many, many...)
times I'll see a story with an interesting title, open it up, scroll
down three pages and realize they're still not fighting, and get bored
and close the tab. There's no hard rule about how long your introduction
should be, but consider: Is this information the reader needs to have? I
remember one story where our heroine, having grown up, is going to
fight her teacher, but after six pages of unimportant detail, I gave up
on anything ever happening. I can't think offhand of any story that
needs a six page introduction, and I would say when in doubt, try to
keep it short. Give the reader all the information they need, but don't
give them anything they don't. And what information does the reader
need? Two main things: Setting and character.
Setting means the setup - where are our heroes fighting? Is it a private match, or is there a crowd? This is also where you can set up the tone of the story - is this a friendly match, is it nothing personal, or a grudge match? What are the stakes of the fight? What rules (if any)? Probably the most important part of the setup is why these characters are in conflict, because this sets the tone for the whole story, what each fighter is looking to get out of the fight, what they might do to the loser, how far they'll go to win the fight, and so on. (Two women who get into a traffic accident in the middle of the night and start brawling might be hitting each other in the crotch; a friendly wrestling match between the moms of two kids who are dating wouldn't be doing any low blows, slapping each other's tits, etc.)
A quick note on motivations: The two oldest cliches in these kinds of stories are fighting over a man, or clothes. I don't recommend using either one. (I've read some great stories where two women are fighting over a man, but they're usually great because of the action, not the motivation.) This is the part to let your imagination run wild; no idea is too out there if the story's written well.
Character is who are characters are - Why are they fighting? What are their skill levels? What do they hope to accomplish? What do they look like? This last one is detail I'm often surprised to see missing; you should try to give the reader enough information to picture the fighters. How tall are they? What is their body shape like? What does their hair look like? What does their face look like? What are they wearing? It may help to give a height and weight to your characters, but I find if they've been described in enough detail, it's not really needed. (You don't need to say that Stephanie is exactly 5'8" and Stacy is 5'2"; the reader just needs to know that she's tall, and how much taller she is than her opponent; likewise they just need to know that Stacy is maybe slightly below average height, and how much shorter she is than Stephanie.)
That being said, if you do give a weight, bear in mind that the number given accords with the body type you've described. I've read a ton of stories where a woman is described as powerful or curvy, but then is given a weight that would make her emaciated. Remember, muscle weighs more than fat, and if a woman is 6'1" with 40EE tits, she's going to look like a rake with two melons taped to it at 120 pounds. I use a site called My Body Gallery (https://www.mybodygallery.com
Setting means the setup - where are our heroes fighting? Is it a private match, or is there a crowd? This is also where you can set up the tone of the story - is this a friendly match, is it nothing personal, or a grudge match? What are the stakes of the fight? What rules (if any)? Probably the most important part of the setup is why these characters are in conflict, because this sets the tone for the whole story, what each fighter is looking to get out of the fight, what they might do to the loser, how far they'll go to win the fight, and so on. (Two women who get into a traffic accident in the middle of the night and start brawling might be hitting each other in the crotch; a friendly wrestling match between the moms of two kids who are dating wouldn't be doing any low blows, slapping each other's tits, etc.)
A quick note on motivations: The two oldest cliches in these kinds of stories are fighting over a man, or clothes. I don't recommend using either one. (I've read some great stories where two women are fighting over a man, but they're usually great because of the action, not the motivation.) This is the part to let your imagination run wild; no idea is too out there if the story's written well.
Character is who are characters are - Why are they fighting? What are their skill levels? What do they hope to accomplish? What do they look like? This last one is detail I'm often surprised to see missing; you should try to give the reader enough information to picture the fighters. How tall are they? What is their body shape like? What does their hair look like? What does their face look like? What are they wearing? It may help to give a height and weight to your characters, but I find if they've been described in enough detail, it's not really needed. (You don't need to say that Stephanie is exactly 5'8" and Stacy is 5'2"; the reader just needs to know that she's tall, and how much taller she is than her opponent; likewise they just need to know that Stacy is maybe slightly below average height, and how much shorter she is than Stephanie.)
That being said, if you do give a weight, bear in mind that the number given accords with the body type you've described. I've read a ton of stories where a woman is described as powerful or curvy, but then is given a weight that would make her emaciated. Remember, muscle weighs more than fat, and if a woman is 6'1" with 40EE tits, she's going to look like a rake with two melons taped to it at 120 pounds. I use a site called My Body Gallery (https://www.mybodygallery.com
If you're doing a female vs female
fight, I recommend describing both characters in detail; if it's a male
versus female fight, you can leave the male underdeveloped; nobody
really cares what the guy looks like, so you only need to give the
reader enough information about him so they know his build and skill
level (and maybe his hair, if the woman is going to grab it). Also, I
suppose it lets male readers project themselves onto the hero easier.
(Sorry, ladies.)
And the final goal, try to
grab the reader right from the first sentence. I don't usually suggest
starting in the middle of the fight or doing the cheesy "Yes, that's me
getting a naked face sit from famous pop star Sia. How did I get here?
Well..." (Although I have done that myself once or twice...) But start
with something unusual that will get the reader's attention and make
them want to see what's going to happen.
With all that
in mind, let's take a look at an introduction to one of my stories. See
if you can spot how I try to do the following:
Keep the introduction short.
Set up where (the guest bedroom) and why (our hero slept with his wife's sister) the characters are going to fight. What is each fighter trying to get out of the fight? (Our hero wants his wife to calm down, and our wife wants to punish him for cheating on her.)
Set up the tone of the fight. This is a grudge match, but our heroine's goal is to punish the hero; she'll happily kick him in the balls, but she won't do anything to permanently injure him. Both fighters are a bit inexperienced, so they won't be giving each other teardrop suplexes and emerald flowsions; the moveset will probably be simple strikes (slaps, punches, kicks) and simple grappling moves (bearhugs, basic slams).
This is a male/female story, so we introduce the female fighter, giving her name, what she looks like, what she's wearing, some hints to her personality and her fighting style, etc. All that we need to describe about our male hero is how he stacks up compared to her.
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"You fucked my sister?!" my wife shrieked.
"Honey, it's not like that -"
"Not like that!" she pointed her chopsticks at me. "What was it like?"
"Listen, I mean... I'm sorry. I didn't mean for it to happen, but -"
"Shut up," she hissed. "When we get home, I'm going to beat the fuck out of you. Then -" she stabbed a dumpling with her chopsticks - "I'm going to beat the shit out of her. Then I'll start thinking about what you need to do before I'm willing to forgive you."
"Okay, honey." I looked down into my lo mien. I'd taken my wife to her favorite Chinese place in the hopes it would dampen her temper, but it didn't seem to be working. "Can I explain what happened?"
"I know what happened," Debra scoffed. "Don't think she cares about you or wanted to have sex with you, specifically. She just has to try to take everything I have. You know," she leaned forward, really warming to the subject, "she's tried to fuck every boyfriend I've ever had, just because she could. I guess I just thought my HUSBAND would be able to keep his DICK in his pants!" The couple at the next table was staring, but one mean glare from my angry wife was enough to send them back to their food.
It was a awkward rest of the dinner as Debra stared holes in me from under her beat-up cowboy hat, and a equally awkward ride home as I knew what was waiting for me when we got there. We’d tussled for fun a few times, and I knew from that how strong my wife was; she’s a stocky, powerful woman, an inch taller than me at 5’9” (usually even taller in her cowgirl boots).
The front door had barely finished closing before my wife was stripping off her orange sundress. "Take your clothes off," she grunted. I took off my shirt, then my pants, unable to stop myself from getting hard as she was down to just her panties and cowgirl boots. "Now don't get any ideas," she hissed, looking at my cock tenting out my underwear. "You're going to be lucky if I don't rip that thing off. Come on." She lead me upstairs and into our guest bedroom, closing the door behind us and attacking without warning, slapping me across the face so hard my head snapped around with the hit. I gasped and...
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Finally, try not to sweat over the
introduction too much. I know that might sound goofy after everything
that's just been laid out, but the introduction is often the most
difficult part. If it's easier, write the fighting part first, then go
back and fill in the introduction; sometimes it's the only way I can
finish a story.
The story itself
You
should consider what words you use to write your story. I personally
get distracted if the same word recurs too many times ("Stephanie
punched Stay in the stomach. Stacy grabbed her stomach and groaned at
her stomach hurting from the stomach punch. Stacy punched Stephanie in
the stomach back and now Stephanie's stomach hurt from Stacy punching
her stomach...") I personally find it helpful to switch around synonyms,
so instead of hearing about someone's stomach 12 times, we might hear
about her midsection, stomach, gut, belly, breadbasket, etc. Here is
where you can think about which word to use; if we have a BBW, she might
have a gut; if we have 18 year old getting beat up by her mom, she
might have a tummy. In these cases, the right word paints a picture for
the reader. Likewise, if we have a Amazonian bodybuilder who looks like
she's cut from pure muscle, it's probably best to avoid referring to her
gut (since she has rock-hard abs), or her tummy (since it's a juvenile
word that implies vulnerability or immaturity). I don't recommend
worrying about this as you're writing the first draft; the most
important thing is to get the story out, and changes like this can be
made when editing or polishing the finished work.
Likewise,
you should consider how you are describing the action. At the start of a
fight someone may get hurt, winded, or get the wind knocked out of
them; towards the end of the fight they might get devastated and
crushed; and only at the end of the fight should they get annihilated,
destroyed, and finished off. If Stephanie hits Stacy once and this is
described as Stephanie "hurting her with a sharp blow", we can expect
Stacy to maybe not feel great, but is still in the fight and capable of
hitting back; if Stephanie "destroys her with an annihilating blow", we
probably don't expect Stacy to get up again.
In
terms of what happens during the fight, it should match what's already
been established during the setup - if we have two soccer moms tussling
over one of them barging in front of the other at Starbucks, we expect
to see slaps, hairpulling, maybe some kicks; if they start dishing out
emerald flowsions, there's a mismatch with the setup. (Unless one of
them is a retired pro wrestler. Huh, there's an idea...)
Likewise, the setup should inform how much damage the fighters inflict on each other - if we have a husband and wife rolling around in their underwear, we don't expect the wife to rip her hubby's balls off or claw his eyes out. The setup should also inform the fighters interacting with each other outside of fighting - are they teasing each other good-naturedly, or taunting each other cruelly?
Likewise, the setup should inform how much damage the fighters inflict on each other - if we have a husband and wife rolling around in their underwear, we don't expect the wife to rip her hubby's balls off or claw his eyes out. The setup should also inform the fighters interacting with each other outside of fighting - are they teasing each other good-naturedly, or taunting each other cruelly?
I find it helpful to
mention how the fighters are doing from time to time; after the first
exchange perhaps Stephanie is just a little sweaty, while Stacy is
getting a black eye; later on Stephanie is breathing hard and holding
her stomach, while Stacy is losing speed and getting sloppy; near the
end of the fight we might see that Stephanie's eye is bruising shut and
her tits are swelling, while Stacy can barely stand, running on fumes
and adrenaline. It can be useful to add these parts to make it clear to
the reader how the fight is developing; they might be surprised by
someone making a heroic comeback, but they shouldn't be surprised at the
point where the victor defeats the loser for good.
Last
is the ending. This is often the hardest part for me; in general you
want to think about three possibilities: Are you setting up a sequel,
bringing the story to a conclusive end, or are you not sure? In the
first case where there's another chapter, set up a sequel hook - this
can be something as simple as someone asking "Rematch?", or you can go
for something more dramatic ("Little did I know this wasn't the last I'd
see of my ex-wife and her vibrating strapon"). If you're ending the
story here, just make sure all the plot threads are concluded; this is
usually the easiest ending. If you're not sure, it's possible to wrap
everything up but still leave a little crack open in case you want to
write another chapter later.
Spelling & Grammar
Now that the story's done, run a spelling and grammar check; This might sounds basic, but I'm always surprised
when people take the time to write something up, but not to do a three
minute spelling check afterwards. DON'T MAKE THE WHOLE STORY IN ALL
CAPS... IT LOOKS LIKE YELLING...
You don't have to make sure the story is APA formatted or anything, but
it can be very distracting if you for example have multiple periods at
the of every sentence.... likewise you dont want to do all lower case or
leave out punctuation. I don't recommend writing the story up as a
script either, as this is usually hard to follow. The aim should always
be simple, clear communication.
After
finishing a story and doing your spelling/grammar check, put it aside
and forget about it for a while. I suggest leaving it alone until you've
almost completely forgotten about it; when you come back to edit it,
not only will you have a much easier time spotting errors your
spelling/grammar check didn't catch (oops, I put "writing" instead of
"writhing"), but it should also help you spot any continuity errors as
well. (This one drives me nuts - I'm almost tempted to just start every
fight with everyone totally naked so I don't have to remember what they
started in and how much, if any, clothes they've lost so far.) If you
have the patience, after doing your editing, put it aside for a second
time, then come back and do a final polish pass before publishing it.
(This is why it takes me forever to finish anything!)
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And last of all, whether you're reading or writing, have fun!
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